Roots and recipes (draft)
Do you know why most foods with the name of California in it have avocado in it? Well that is because using avocado in many foods started in California, and there were a lot of avocados in California. Every time my family comes to dinner to dinner at my grandparents house and see the California Maki sushi, they are all so happy. We rarely ever have California Maki Sushi. After my interview with my grandpa I have learned so much about the sushi and how he makes it.
Here are the ingredients that you use and how you make it. You need short grained rice, imitation snow crab, tobico, sugar, mayonnaise, cucumber, avocado, sushi mat, sesame seed, sushi vinegar, and salt. First you cook the rice and season it with sushi vinegar. Then you mix imitation snow crab, tobico, sugar, and mayonnaise then you have crab salad. Next you mix the rice with sushi vinegar and salt. After that you put the nori on the sushi mat and put rice on the nori the sesame seeds on the nori. Then you put a piece of saran wrap on it and flip it over. Then you spread wasabi on the opposite side of the nori without the rice and put on slices of avocado and cucumber and crab salad. Lastly, you tighten up the sushi and press it down slightly to make it more firm.
During the interview I asked my grandpa a few questions. One of them were how did you learn to make this sushi. He said that he learned by watching my grandma make it. I also asked him if it is hard to make sushi. He said that at first it is hard to learn. As you go on and you practice though, it gets easier.
Hopefully I can learn how to make this sushi as well as my grandpa can. So that I can teach my children and so on how to make it so I can pass on the recipe. My whole family loves this sushi they say it tastes so delicious. As for me, I don’t really care for it even though my grandpa works so hard and long on it. I hope that one day I will be able to love the California Maki Sushi as much as my family does.
I liked how you described how the Maki sushi was made and the different ingredients that you use to make it. There is an error in the first paragraph though because it repeats "to dinner". That was the only minor error though.
ReplyDeleteFirst off, I really liked how you incorporated the entire recipe of the process of making the sushi.
ReplyDeleteUSE MORE SENSORY DETAIL! When I read your essay I want to be able to actually have a picture in my head of what is going on while your sushi is being made.
Lastly, while reading the part about the questions being asked, I got kinda lost on what part was the answer and what part was the question. Italicizing and/or putting quotations around the question will make it easier to read.
Fixing these minor issues will make your essay really good! Good Luck with your essay!!!
Hi Dior,
ReplyDeleteI agree with your teammates that you did a nice job of describing how to make California roll. I do think that they could have done more, especially more advice on how to improve.
One of the biggest difficulties, I think, is that you don't like this dish. So you can't really provide the sensory detail about its taste and "specialness" because you don't eat it.
If there is some other reason you selected it, you need to highlight that, because this is more than a recipe assignment. It is an assignment about you and your roots. That part is missing right now in the essay.
It may be that you can connect with California sushi even though you don't eat it...but you need to show those connections...with your grandpa, your family, your roots. Right now, the main history of the dish goes to California, but I am guessing that your roots are not California?
Let me know if you have questions.
mrs s