college essay rough draft

            In my life there are many things that interest me.  But the main thing that interest me is soccer.  I have been playing soccer since I was 7 years old.  Soccer had mad a huge impact on my life.  Soccer has been my favorite sport from the beginning.  The first time I played soccer, I played for AYSO it wasn’t really competitive, but at that age sports weren’t really competitive.  Then as the years went by and I got older is started playing for a club called Real.  But a little later they merged with a team called rush, which is the team I am currently playing for.  I am apart of the Hawaii Rush 98 girls nike team.  I have been with them for about four years now.  Playing with this team has impacted me and helped me to become a better person.  The first reason soccer has impacted my life is because since it is a team sport, you have to learn to work together and like each other no matter what.  In life you will have to know how to work as a team.  Another reason is because since I started playing soccer for a competitive team, you have to be able to manage your time very well.  Since you have practice a lot and games every weekend, you have to make sure that you do your homework whenever you have free time.  You will also need to sacrifice many things like hanging out with your friends on the weekends because you have to do homework or because you have an important game or tournament coming up.  Managing your time is just helping you to prepare you for high school and life in the future, because for high school when you play a sport you will have practice everyday of the week and sometimes on the weekends, and games almost every weekend. And if you don’t keep your grades up then you won’t be able to play.  I know these things because last year as a freshman I tried out for the high school soccer team.  I was one of the lucky ones to make the varsity team.  That had taught me that managing your time is important because if you want to play then you will have to maintain your grades.  Soccer has also helped me because playing for this competitive team has made me a better player mentally and physically.  Soccer has helped me to improve as a person because it has taught me that I am not the only person that matters to get through in life you have to work together to conquer the tough times.  It has also helped me mentally because in soccer when times get tough and you just feel like stopping and giving up, you just keep pushing through it and give 100% and leave it all out on the field even if you are tired.

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college essay question

San Jose StateUniversity

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California State University Fullerton

http://www.fullerton.edu/

University of Washington

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University of Oregon
http://www.uoregon.edu/

University of Oregon essay information:

The UO is interested in learning more about you. Write an essay of 500 words or less that shares information that we cannot find elsewhere on your application. Any topic you choose is welcome. Some ideas you might consider include your future ambitions and goals, a special talents or unusual interest that sets you apart from your peers, or a significant experience that influenced your life.

coming of age draft

coming of age draft

         When I was seven years old, I loved playing volleyball.  At that time it was my favorite sport. My parents had called many different volleyball clubs to inquire about tryouts.  They said the were not taking younger kids, they would only take kids in middle school or higher.  As a result of that, I got interested in other sports like soccer and softball.  And until this day I still play soccer and softball, for clubs and high school.  I still like volleyball but soccer and softball are my favorite sports.  These sports have helped me become the person that I am today.

         The first reason soccer and softball made me who I am today is because I met people that have became my best and closest friends.  Even my parents have made some good friends.  My family and I hang out more with my sports teams than I do with my friends from school.  My teammates and I just share this special bond that makes us really close.  These are my friends that I have had for the longest time and I hope to stay friends with them for a long time.  Even when we don’t have games our families still get together. My sports friends and I have been through so much together.  At games we need to trust and rely on each other.  Allowing them to become my close friends has helped me to be my real self around them without worrying that they are judging or saying bad things about me.  When I am around them there is nothing stopping us.  I will do anything around them and for them.  If they ever are in need of anything or they need help I will be right by there.  I’ll always be by their side because I know that if I ever need help they will always be there for me; like so many times during our games.

The second reason my sports have helped shape me in to the person that I am today is that sports have taught me to become more disciplined.  Everyday is a routine, breakfast, school, homework, practice, and then again homework.  Since my time is limited I even have to do some homework in the car and days I don’t have homework, my parents want me to read.  Although I don’t love reading, I know that I should.  I am very busy traveling to school and sports that I have to make the most of my time.  It also gives me a chance to talk with my parents and grandparents in the car and catch up.

         Lastly, my sports have changed me because since I started I have gone on many different trips.  Just this year alone I went on 4 trips, one to the mainland and three inter-island trips.  When I was younger I went one of my trips without my parents and while I was up there I realized how much I missed my parents.  As the years have gone by I have gone on several trips without my parents and I didn’t miss my parents as much.  This has helped me because I experienced what it is like to travel and be by myself without a parent with me.  When I started traveling by myself at first it was pretty hard I had to pack and do everything alone.  Now I can pack and get every thing ready fairly easily.  From these experiences I have grown and have gotten more mature. The trips I have taken by myself have helped me to prepare for the future because when the time comes I am now opened to going to college in the mainland.  Before high school I told my parents that I wanted to stay home and attend the University of Hawaii.  Now I see that being open and growing I will hopefully have more opportunities.

         In conclusion, as you can see my sports have made a big impact to my life.  With out them, there are many things that I wouldn’t have done before I wouldn’t have done many things that I do know, and I am more willing to take a chance being able to rely on my sport families.  My family and I have met, and made some really good friends.  It also helped me to learn what it will be like in the real world when I get older.  I will have to be by myself with out my parents guiding me and telling me what to do but I look forward to the experiences.  In the future, I will be able to do things on my own because of these experiences.  I am very grateful that I was able to go on all of these trips meet people and to grow up because of sports.

blog changes

I made a few changes to my blog.  One of the changes i made were that I changed my title to "think about it."  Another change that I made was that I changed the background color to rainbow.  The reason for that is because now my background stands out more and because I like colors.  Another thing that I changed was my picture, before I didn't have a picture but know I have a picture and they know what I look like.  The last thing i changed was the I archived my blog just by the years.

mini essay

I believe that it is the people or tourist fault because the state put up signs warning them about the dangers about going there.  So if they go there it will be at their own risk, and if anything happens to them it will be their fault because the state had warned them.  It would also be their fault because in the article because David Potts disappeared while at one Maui’s popular Nakalele point blowhole even though there was a sign warning that the blowhole was dangerous.  It is also a common sense thing by the people because that guy David was dancing around the blowhole then he got knocked by a big wave into the blow hole, and that is why people tell you to never turn your back to the ocean.  Also in this article, another guy died because he had a lack of common sense.  He went to the Halona blowhole and straddled the blowhole and it let out and he went 3-5 feet in the air.  In conclusion, the state should not be at fault for what those people did it was their own fault they did it at their own risk.