Forgetting things
that’s what she’s known for.
she’s definitely not
the smartest fish in the sea.
Although she can be ditzy
she’s pretty funny too.
If you ever need a helping hand
she’s always there for you.
You’ll never meet someone
as loud and crazy as her.
Throughout the ocean blue
singing her little whale songs.
She has this little motto
to “Just keep swimming” along.
good start. you need to add your own personal details/stories. You described dori really well that you can relate to. However, we want to hear more about you. Also, go beyond the basic adjectives and descriptions (i.e., funny, crazy, loud). Tell us something new, you are giving very broad descriptions give us specifics. AS(1+) LATE.
ReplyDeleteHey Dior, your poem was easily understood and you described dori very well. Although I liked your poem, I feel that you need to add in more of a connection between you and dori, where the reader knows the allusion between both sides. Anyways good job. (:
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